Friday, September 18, 2009

Diagnosis: Wrackbloit

Apologies Van, for you've already heard this one - but to everyone else, this particular post consists purely of my nonsense poem, written during today's spare. If you would like a glossary of the words, I would be happy to oblige - however, I think for the first read-through I'll leave these foreign words and their meanings to your imagination. It's much more fun that way! Enjoy! :)


Last night I dreamed a dream as I lay sleeping in my bed;
I dreamed of teeny, tiny glinks fluzzing 'round my head.
I swattled and I swiggled, trying to catch them in mid-flight -
Alas, those winged fuzballs stayed, try my hardest though I might.

Come morn, I did awake quite curflubled in my room,
as the glinks in my ears whispered: "Welcome, welcome to your doom!"
I stumbled to the mirror in my giddly, groggy state,
and discovered purple bloofers bloofled to my skin, like bait.

If you believe this is the end, I tell you, there is more;
I bloinked about the house in search of shnar-filled corridors.
And only once my hair turned blue, my townails broke and rough,
Did I call the doctor and exclaim, "I've had enough!"

I then journeyed to the clinc and waited for my turn,
nervously anticipating answers I would learn:
"It is my hypothesis that this imaginary sploit,
I regret to inform you, is the make-believe wrackbloit!


In no way is this poem perfect. I haven't taken the time to change lines that I don't think fit, nor have I really taken the time to emphasize the implied fact that the doctor is speaking to our poor narrator at the end. However, I would like your opinions and suggestions for further development. If I was to take this poem and develop it into a story or a childhood journal entry perhaps, do you have any ideas regarding delivery or context?

thanks,
DHALL.

PS. I won't usually be writing this nonsense stuff... I'll have something different for you come Sunday!

4 comments:

  1. I loved your nonsense words! Although they were complete nonsense they were a fun way to leave the reader with their own take on what the real meanings are. I think this would make a great dr.seuss-like children's book.

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  2. I agree with Taylor- this poem definitely appeals to children and would make a fantastic Dr.Seuss book. And although I don't know for sure what your nonsense words ment, you still managed to make them flow nicely into your work as if they were actual words. The only thing I might alter are the last few lines to continue the flow. I can't believe you came up with it so quickly! Great work! :)

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  3. I don't have much to say Diana apart from pointing out the fact that it takes skill to create nonesense that makes sense and I believe you've captured that.

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  4. I agree with Taylor in that the writing of this piece is VERY seussical, I can just picture the brightly colored pictures to accompany the descriptive lines like 'and discovered purple bloofers bloofled to my skin, like bait.' and 'And only once my hair turned blue, my townails broke and rough'.
    Very good job in your descriptive language while still using nonsensical words :)

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