Sunday, October 11, 2009

Autumn Falling





The leaves become crispy;
as the winds begin to chill,
The clouds settle in;
Causing the trees to play,
A new soundtrack is laid down,
Replacing the Summer;
With new sights and sounds.

Autumn falls in, as the summer drifts,
the sound of waves fade; the insects die,
What was once green, is now orange, red and brown,
The soft mud is now cold dirt,
Dew on grass; now frost,
The trees begin to shed,
As they litter the grass.

The days are lost, as the nights are found,
My face grows tender,
My fingertips, icy,
The air I breathe is cold,
The warmth I exhale, visible,
My cheeks rosy;
As I try to keep my hands warm.



In the heart of wood,
Once surrounded by thick air,
& Distant laughter, and the hum of play,
I stand in silence, blanketed with comfort,
The air so chill, so crisp
as I breathe, my nose hollowed out by the cold,
My lungs frosty, my veins icy,
At last; Love is found,


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This something I wrote while very chilly, which influenced this quite a bit hehe. I love the fall, it's my favourite season. The colours are amazing, the air is clean, everything is so calm. It's not as wet as the spring, it's not as cold as the winter, and it's not as polluted as the summer. It's simply the best, so thats why I wrote this :)

3 comments:

  1. This was very nicely written. I too love the colours and beauty of fall - just not the cold that comes with it. i would recommend having the sentences around the same lengths to improve the flow.
    I love the line "The days are lost, as the nights are found" I don't know why, but this paints such a clear image in my mind.
    Good use of imagery and nice tone.

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  2. I loved this portion:

    The air so chill, so crisp
    as I breathe, my nose hollowed out by the cold,
    My lungs frosty, my veins icy,
    At last; Love is found,

    the imagery there was beautiful, and I love the smell and feeling of the crisp cold autumn air :)

    However, why did you end with a comma? was this intentional?

    But aside from that I really liked it :D awesome job.

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  3. I agree with everything you said, i love the fall, the colours, even the crisp breeze, that turns the tip of your noise alittle pink.
    I liked your description the playing of the trees. very creative

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