Good Bye World

Hello everyone, so this piece is inspired by a moment i had at work today were everything was going so crazy, i thought i might pass out.
enjoy.

I'm passing out
I'm passing out
Hands are shaking,
feet are breaking,
I'm passing out.
My head is spinning,
the tickets printing,
I'm passing out.
The world is going black
and my head is going to smack
on the floor that hits back.
I'm passing out.
Good Bye World.

Hey guys, i wrote this poem after getting back from a horrendously long shift at work.
Its all about the simple thoughts that go through your mind as you are slowly slipping out of consciousness. I always imagined that if you're passing out, you would not be taking in very specific details about your surrounding and would only realized the very basic elements of whats happening. That's why i focused more on the feeling that this person is immediately feeling because the next moment they would not remember them.
This poem is also written with a certain element of euphoria and glee. That these pains that you feel have ceased to hurt you and you just feel happy inside. They way i see this piece is, that it is almost a song or a nursery rhyme. Something that the person is just uttering as they are slipping away.
I did not use any consistent rhyming scheme in this piece because i just think that it would take away from the piece. I did use some rhyming because i think that the character would probable find it funny that some of there words actually rhyme as there saying this, and it would add more glee to there voice, which i think adds to the sense of euphoria.

I would love to hear your opinion, and any constructive criticism. thank you