Sunday, November 1, 2009

Deck of Cards

You are like a
Deck of carrds
Two cards are never the same
Shuffling emotions
Dealing Arguments
Playing game's with people's hearts
Giving up one hand
To take another
Full house of friends
You couldn't deal
You fluch away all emotions
And tank out
But when it's all over
Who's left going fishing?
Now your left with one card
UNO is what you say
But then that card is multiplied
Now you have too many to count
Spades is a game of wits
So either you have a good hand
Or a good partner
But can you deal in the game of blackjack
Put all that's worthy of love on the line
Is your love
Worthy to be dealt
That's for me to decide
When I put my cards on the table
In the end...

4 comments:

  1. i really like this poem. i think you used the metaphor of a deck of cards perfectly to describe a person. very interesting concept.

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  2. good use of metiphores and machanics
    this is a cool concept and i think you expressed it very well

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  3. This a great concept when you take something seemingly unrelated to something else, and draw the connections yourself. I really enjoy the connection you've established here between the two subjects. My only suggestion is punctuation, however the poem is still effective despite that

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  4. yes to the punctuation, but ahh his concept is fantastic! i absolutely love it!! i really like the lines "shuffling emotions / dealing arguments". very clever, nicely put. its also a nice break in the structure/flow of the poem too. it's choppy and extremely effective.

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