Friday, November 27, 2009

Fruit Salad

I am an apple.
Don't drop me,
or I'll bruise.

I am a pineapple.
My exterior is rough,
but on the inside I'm sweet.

I am a grape.
I am more fun,
when surrounded by others.

I am a watermelon.
Happiest on a summer picnic,
but sometimes you must spit out the seeds.

I am a blueberry.
I can look very tempting,
but sometimes I'm bitter.

I am a pear.
My shape is far from perfect,
but I am always sweet.

I am an orange.
My skin is tough,
so that I won't be damaged.

I am a banana.
I look like I'm all smiles,
but sometimes I'm split.

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This poem is about multiple personalities. Sometimes I feel that I could be any one of these 'fruits.'
I think this poem needs a conclusion. Any ideas?
I also think it needs a better flow. Suggestions for improvement?

4 comments:

  1. i think this is a cool concept for a poem.
    for an ending, maybe show how they can all combine to make a person.
    good description of the each persons characteristics

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  2. AWWW so cute!
    I thought the flow was good enough its like a bunch of haikus almost.
    Actually adorableee :D
    I love how each one can be representative of a different person, or one very complex person ;P
    But really, I liked the format of it.
    And I also like fruit salad :D

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  3. i absolutely love this idea! so very creative!
    i might have changed around the breaks a little
    because there isn't a rhyme scheme. i dont know.
    but i really love it. you identified major personable characteristics in a thoughtful, creative, unique way!! i love the fruit metaphors

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  4. haha this is soooo cute! (A good haha, as in i loved it!). The simplicity could not be more effective! The idea of each fruit representing a different person or personality type is so creative! One of my favourites for sure!

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