Feverish Ranting

Just go slow,
Don't-
Don't rush.
Time is on our side
for once
For twice around the track
It's not time;
the game hasn't begun
the clock isn't on
We never touched the starting line
and I could barely stand
But,
Under fluorescent lighting
you held my trembling hands.

Stumbling slowly,
we'll help each other home
On wandering legs
(like we also do)
Hold on to me;
I'll promise you
But don't try to talk
My words are cold -
your lips unfold
and it all falls through.
but I have so much left to say to you.

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I figured I'd try something less structured and more in the style of a free write since it's not really what I normally do, I normally find some sort of stronger structure.
Do you think it would've been better less structured? More structured?
Did it flow?
Also do you think the emotion is conveys is strong and consistent?
I feel it kind of shifts in feeling throughout. Do you think this is effective?
That is all :)